tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post7605700857301240999..comments2023-11-28T22:47:40.465-05:00Comments on Tales from FAR Manor: Writing WibblesLarry Kollarhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-4695494264544607082013-05-30T19:07:03.039-04:002013-05-30T19:07:03.039-04:00I like c and #1. I know loglines are short, but yo...I like c and #1. I know loglines are short, but you still need to hint at plot, and the first two could apply to any story. C is much more specific.<br /><br />I actually dislike #2 because it sounds like a movie trailer. So, matter of taste. But #2 is also a bit vague at the beginning, and specificity is usually what grabs people. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05028558997383919768noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-18104826228427618332013-05-30T14:35:20.793-04:002013-05-30T14:35:20.793-04:00C because it is catchy
and 2 because I like the &...C because it is catchy<br /><br />and 2 because I like the "In a distant land..." line. Plus it's sounds like a line from a blockbuster movie trailer :). Craig Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07176851401465801580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-86734086621883949002013-05-29T21:55:27.642-04:002013-05-29T21:55:27.642-04:00c), because it's the only one that gives us a ...c), because it's the only one that gives us a tangible idea of the plot. a) and b) could just as easily describe The Great Gatsby.<br /><br />3), because it's also the most concrete and sets up some understandable relationships and plot advancement. It's very comprehensible.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-15116503750309637482013-05-29T21:33:32.578-04:002013-05-29T21:33:32.578-04:00Thanks for the comments, people — keep 'em com...Thanks for the comments, people — keep 'em coming! Details are good, too. For completeness, I'm including votes from Twitter in this comment:<br /><br />@<b>LacyLGonzales</b>: B and 3<br /><br />@<b>1FantasyFanatic</b>: For loglines don't use b, a is the best written but somewhat generic. C applies the most. :)<br /><br />@<b>Michael_A_Tate</b>: loglines a and b were pretty catchy. I needed a couple passes on 1 and 2: 3 was nice and clear but lacked pop.<br /><br />Adriana, one of my beta readers weighed in here, and emailed me a suggested rewrite. So I'm getting good feedback, which is what I wanted!<br /><br />Keep the votes coming, folks — even more so, what influenced your choice…Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-87131121190760016162013-05-29T20:22:48.260-04:002013-05-29T20:22:48.260-04:00b and 2b and 2Helen A. Howellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12748128819820230841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-9406661351890091562013-05-29T14:35:29.045-04:002013-05-29T14:35:29.045-04:00I like Logline C and blurb #2 Although 3 is good t...I like Logline C and blurb #2 Although 3 is good too.<br /><br />I've been working on a blurb for my YA and it's a big PITA! Slowly getting there though. Having people rip into it so I can rewrite it.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-10814055991043440332013-05-29T11:41:45.595-04:002013-05-29T11:41:45.595-04:00Hiya Larry,
I guess I'd go c&3. One ques...Hiya Larry,<br /><br />I guess I'd go c&3. One question though. Is this a modern day or in the past? In 3 when you use the word hometown it makes me think it's in the modern day. Just a question though. ;)FMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14471558413705720149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-26154317791473023772013-05-29T10:08:04.796-04:002013-05-29T10:08:04.796-04:00B&3B&3EJ Hobbshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07678857901520016380noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-75551925177014052062013-05-29T09:24:43.681-04:002013-05-29T09:24:43.681-04:00c and 1c and 1Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-37974251525833141322013-05-29T07:56:11.060-04:002013-05-29T07:56:11.060-04:00C and 3 for me, no question of it. C hits the main...C and 3 for me, no question of it. C hits the main chords (fantasy! romance!) without sounding like a riddle. 3 does the best job of explaining setting, main characters, and the conflict hook in quick strokes, but without making any assumptions of what the reader's read before. Katherine Hajerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08270232675026751342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-56257546326873694722013-05-29T07:52:40.012-04:002013-05-29T07:52:40.012-04:00Maybe you should ask your beta readers their input...Maybe you should ask your beta readers their input on the book, how would they describe it - you never know how others "see" what you've written. They have a reader's eye and that could help. <br /><br />An external opinion might put everything into place. I'd go with a + 2:<br /><br />What is home, when everything has changed?<br /><br />A hero’s homecoming.<br />A tragic misunderstanding.<br />A dangerous mission.<br /><br />In a distant land, sundered from Sura, his only friend an exotic girl, Mik Dragonrider must learn where his loyalties lie, and Sura must learn to trust.<br /><br />Good luck and happy writing!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00872129157580383933noreply@blogger.com