tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post7647966448033543964..comments2023-11-28T22:47:40.465-05:00Comments on Tales from FAR Manor: #FridayFlash: Immortal CurseLarry Kollarhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-56907009839298044052011-05-08T13:46:44.342-04:002011-05-08T13:46:44.342-04:00The thing is, how many beers have they had already...The thing is, how many beers have they had already? I mean, I really want him to be the immortal guy, but what if this is just a wheeze? <br />Great flash though, and love Rhoda.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-34639968521145983502011-05-08T10:28:57.685-04:002011-05-08T10:28:57.685-04:00Thanks much, Jon, and welcome to the free-range in...Thanks much, Jon, and welcome to the free-range insane asylum!Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-74545750808678963492011-05-07T00:03:55.489-04:002011-05-07T00:03:55.489-04:00I love the idea of forgotten gods being comatose. ...I love the idea of forgotten gods being comatose. And it works so well as the set up for the piece. Nice.<br />~jonJ. M. Strotherhttp://www.jmstrother.com/MadUtopia/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-84298384298381190242011-05-04T07:43:20.883-04:002011-05-04T07:43:20.883-04:00Such great conversational feel to this story, capt...Such great conversational feel to this story, capturing the close friendship of two mates.<br />Adam B @revhappinessAdam Bhttp://afullnessinbrevity.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-42328810845752542182011-05-02T18:56:02.621-04:002011-05-02T18:56:02.621-04:00Rephrasing what John said: more, more!
And pleas...Rephrasing what John said: more, more! <br /><br />And please pass the nachos and beer. ;DMarihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07303695124956391293noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-82745755095786099642011-05-01T14:58:13.841-04:002011-05-01T14:58:13.841-04:00Hi all!
Thanks, Helen. It was fun to write too.
...Hi all!<br /><br />Thanks, Helen. It was fun to write too.<br /><br />Ganymeder, I'm fooling with a couple ideas along those lines. Here's hoping the mother-in-law doesn't wake up too!<br /><br />Thanks, Aidan. The rhythm isn't one I ever tried before, it just came out — and felt right for this story. But as for convincing, if surviving getting beheaded doesn't convince you… maybe I should have left in the part how he had to dig himself out of a grave?Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-74958697407004417852011-05-01T12:26:50.079-04:002011-05-01T12:26:50.079-04:00Sometimes it takes an outsider to see clearly. I e...Sometimes it takes an outsider to see clearly. I enjoyed the beats you used with the dialogue.<br /><br />You know, you haven't truly convinced me that immortality is a curse yet. ;)AidanFhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09876041003278004627noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-10421321799277907982011-05-01T03:53:10.491-04:002011-05-01T03:53:10.491-04:00For an immortal story, I found this very believabl...For an immortal story, I found this very believable and touching. I'm hoping for more actually, maybe a series or novella? Romance and ancient forgotten gods... What's not to love?Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-64401761103331269952011-04-30T21:37:11.154-04:002011-04-30T21:37:11.154-04:00I loved this, the dialogue was fun, the idea of an...I loved this, the dialogue was fun, the idea of an immortal travelling through changing times really appeals. I liked the ending too, it leaves you wanting more, but more might just be too much. Now I am left with my imagination to visualise what happened next.<br /><br />Nice piece of flash.<br /><br />The nachos made me hungry!Helenhttp://helen-scribbles.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-75514404676189115912011-04-30T21:25:22.946-04:002011-04-30T21:25:22.946-04:00Hi all, and welcome to the free-range insane asylu...Hi all, and welcome to the free-range insane asylum!<br /><br />Lee-Ann, like I said in an earlier comment, Rhonda was originally part of the background and insisted on getting more attention. I had a character do that in <i>White Pickups</i> (novel, 1.5th draft serialized, look for the link at top-right) too.<br /><br />Icy, thanks for that. I do like short stories where you can imagine for yourself what happens next too.<br /><br />Aweeadventure, thanks — that's the feel I wanted to capture, the conversation about the fantastic juxtaposed with everyday drinking (and snacking). Good to know I got it right!Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-28290865475235535042011-04-30T12:44:47.427-04:002011-04-30T12:44:47.427-04:00That was good fun - loved the way the conversation...That was good fun - loved the way the conversation slipped back and forth between the supernatural conversation and the everyday, ordering of more drinks. Also liked the ending, just enough of a hint about what happen next.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-33509945249477085352011-04-30T11:51:10.973-04:002011-04-30T11:51:10.973-04:00I really liked it! To be honest, I think it's ...I really liked it! To be honest, I think it's fine as it is - not every flash demands "more" (and of course once it strays beyond 1000 words it's no longer a flash, it's a serial) and sometimes just leaving the story to the imagination renders the original work more powerful.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-29567433808078706772011-04-30T10:11:54.613-04:002011-04-30T10:11:54.613-04:00I second ibc4's comment about Rhonda too... ve...I second ibc4's comment about Rhonda too... very nicely written.Lee-Annhttp://leeannkhoh.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-31493233534539247392011-04-30T10:10:06.408-04:002011-04-30T10:10:06.408-04:00Love the interaction between these two and the jux...Love the interaction between these two and the juxtapositioning of the ancient and present, though as others have alluded to, it doesn't quite feel complete yet. :)Lee-Annhttp://leeannkhoh.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-90685810953465113882011-04-30T08:59:44.503-04:002011-04-30T08:59:44.503-04:00Morning!
Thanks, Maria. Yeah, immortality looks p...Morning!<br /><br />Thanks, Maria. Yeah, immortality looks pretty good from this end of the stick, but (like everything else) has its drawbacks!<br /><br />Steve, notice how they got quiet whenever Rhonda was around? Not that she's paying attention to their conversation anyway, but they taking at least some steps to avoid being overheard…Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-31062836162184825462011-04-30T07:08:04.135-04:002011-04-30T07:08:04.135-04:00Great story FAR, I like the dialogue exchange betw...Great story FAR, I like the dialogue exchange between the characters.<br /><br />As has already been said, Jeremy's underreaction, and possible inability, or refusal to comprehend.<br /><br />You could imagine overhearing this conversation at a bar, and thinking.. <br />"Hmmm, those two have had enough..." :)Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-695213954462168652011-04-29T23:52:11.528-04:002011-04-29T23:52:11.528-04:00Great story. Love what you did with the prompt. Po...Great story. Love what you did with the prompt. Poor guy! Glad there's going to be more.Joz Varlohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12750541029227514781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-63278745642883740332011-04-29T22:23:57.067-04:002011-04-29T22:23:57.067-04:00Hey all! The Readers Have Spoken, there will be mo...Hey all! The Readers Have Spoken, there will be more.<br /><br />A.M., I was imagining Gil's dragging his head to his body using his jaw muscles… in pain all along.<br /><br />Boran, it will happen. Like I said above, maybe not next week, but soon.Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-83029981741862859852011-04-29T21:57:29.282-04:002011-04-29T21:57:29.282-04:00Well done, Far! That was a tease of an ending. M...Well done, Far! That was a tease of an ending. More please, sir!boran2https://www.blogger.com/profile/10483728578007756485noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-13703612194739079732011-04-29T21:32:33.603-04:002011-04-29T21:32:33.603-04:00You can't end it like that! What happens next?...You can't end it like that! What happens next??<br /><br />I actually was very amused by the whole beheading imagery -- trying to crawl towards your head. Should be gross but I found it funny :-PA.M.Hartehttp://amharte.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-18035163267158211642011-04-29T19:44:17.207-04:002011-04-29T19:44:17.207-04:00Hi all!
JohnX, we don't know how many beers t...Hi all!<br /><br />JohnX, we don't know how many beers they'd had… maybe Gil's tongue was loosened? Jeremy too. Maybe he's trying to emulate Gil's aplomb.<br /><br />JohnW, the nachos were another thing that got caught in the strainer. :-D Sounds like there's some public demand going on, I'll say more after the shouts here.<br /><br />Tony, remember that Gil's had a LOT of practice. He might say that people as a whole haven't changed much over recorded history.<br /><br />Ian, Rhonda's one of those minor characters that really want more attention. I'll be interesting to see what happens with her further on.<br /><br />Chuck, it might be easier if they're not around to get on each others' nerves! :-)<br /><br />PJ, I think awakening a god (or even a demigod) would be a tricky thing. And let's hope the daughter-unit doesn't wake up Dear Old Mom too!<br /><br />Raven, that's really a good point. How many friends and loved ones has Gil oulived?<br /><br />A lot of you want more, and who am I to deny you? It might not be next week, but I can kind of feel how it's going to continue, if not (yet) end.Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-52262429037042064162011-04-29T18:36:52.497-04:002011-04-29T18:36:52.497-04:00That really touches the heart. What good is immort...That really touches the heart. What good is immortality without someone to share it with.Raven Corinn Carlukhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06014248975870886289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-9044568571320206342011-04-29T17:50:16.052-04:002011-04-29T17:50:16.052-04:00More, please. Very fun story. I hope he can ditc...More, please. Very fun story. I hope he can ditch the MIL ...PJhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07521953491880916840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-21028834856990454892011-04-29T17:31:38.908-04:002011-04-29T17:31:38.908-04:00I like this one a lot, FAR!
I'm with the oth...I like this one a lot, FAR! <br /><br />I'm with the others, though. A follow up or two would be fun to read. Marriage is challenging enough without adding a few thousand years between greetings. It would interesting, I'm sure. :)Chuck Allenhttp://www.chuckallen.usnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-81951787386355321722011-04-29T17:06:59.042-04:002011-04-29T17:06:59.042-04:00The one thing I will take away from this post is h...The one thing I will take away from this post is how rounded Rhonda was. <br /><br />A well-drawn character that *enhances* the piece. Good writing.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com