tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post2295935923367880613..comments2023-11-28T22:47:40.465-05:00Comments on Tales from FAR Manor: #FridayFlash: Freak of NatureLarry Kollarhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comBlogger29125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-32816790615067009782011-07-25T23:04:14.543-04:002011-07-25T23:04:14.543-04:00Thanks, WG. Hey, that's a thought about saving...Thanks, WG. Hey, that's a thought about saving on gas — but if your girlfriend decided to drop you, it might be a <b>long</b> way down!Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-20608951819744095422011-07-25T19:56:55.354-04:002011-07-25T19:56:55.354-04:00YES! That's right, the muched anticpiated sequ...YES! That's right, the muched anticpiated sequel. It didn't dissapoint. <br />I'd tottaly date an Enchanted One. Think about it, it would save on gas!W.G. Cambronhttp://www.cambronwriter.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-90214208827115601672011-07-24T10:08:52.690-04:002011-07-24T10:08:52.690-04:00Hi all…
Rebecca, Adam, I've started taking no...Hi all…<br /><br />Rebecca, Adam, <a href="http://farmanor.blogspot.com/2011/07/wednesday-wibbles.html" rel="nofollow">I've started taking notes</a> (scroll down to see the mind map).Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-34016897606436502972011-07-23T01:15:17.905-04:002011-07-23T01:15:17.905-04:00You do have a good premise here to expand it into ...You do have a good premise here to expand it into a novel. A lovely light touch and well told.<br />Adam B @revhappinessAdam Bhttp://afullnessinbrevity.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-82127491559945687502011-07-20T05:05:37.771-04:002011-07-20T05:05:37.771-04:00This is a brilliant story, I was totally hooked in...This is a brilliant story, I was totally hooked into it and I have to say I think you should take these characters and write a novel, it's wonderful.Rebecca Eminhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01931904595437049369noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-44469786936151453812011-07-20T00:08:15.035-04:002011-07-20T00:08:15.035-04:00Hi Foregoreality! (I think I mentioned it already,...Hi Foregoreality! (I think I mentioned it already, but Lordy I love that handle)<br /><br />Very good observation. The wings appear when needed, mainly. That's something that will be brought out in the expanded story. (I've had several people, including YA writers, say this is good stuff and it's ballooning into a full-fledged project. When I get the <i>White Pickups</i> project finished!!!)Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-65962368107173030322011-07-19T23:57:55.574-04:002011-07-19T23:57:55.574-04:00I just went and read the first story, and then rea...I just went and read the first story, and then read this one. One continuation observation: if Kate's mother has wings, wouldn't her dad have noticed them and thus would Kate's wings be less of a shock to him? Or can the wings be hidden somehow (not just by clothes I mean)? Apart from that, I loved the stories!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-64466263657404541702011-07-18T22:50:52.279-04:002011-07-18T22:50:52.279-04:00Thanks, Aidan!Thanks, Aidan!Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-25927529188677453942011-07-17T13:01:09.935-04:002011-07-17T13:01:09.935-04:00Nice final line. You have a gorgeous touch with YA...Nice final line. You have a gorgeous touch with YA themes. I liked "Even if they do… well, people are good at not seeing things." for its greater truth.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14170148559429001125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-77353898043240593562011-07-17T09:36:38.090-04:002011-07-17T09:36:38.090-04:00Thanks, Tim. Most people *are* good about not seei...Thanks, Tim. Most people *are* good about not seeing things… but some of us see things that aren't there and write them down?Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-8497386575700594152011-07-17T01:30:55.246-04:002011-07-17T01:30:55.246-04:00I especially liked, "… well, people are good ...I especially liked, "… well, people are good at not seeing things." But I see you've done a fine job continuing this tale.Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-43023661612081230812011-07-16T16:11:05.223-04:002011-07-16T16:11:05.223-04:00Hey all!
Helen, that's pretty much what I was...Hey all!<br /><br />Helen, that's pretty much what I was going with here. And like Boran says below, what is "normal"? Don't ask me, I don't think my life comes anywhere near it!<br /><br />Flyingscribbler, thanks much. I'm glad that sentence worked; I needed to point out it was a new moon somewhere.<br /><br />Boran, like I told Helen, I'd have less of a clue about <i>normal</i> than Kate's dad has about what she's going through (putting herself through?). Thanks much!<br /><br />Chuck, did your daughter like the stories? It *is* true about the good-enough moments. I wrote that in partially as a reminder to myself.<br /><br />Steve, I'm hearing it loud & clear. ;-) Morgan's revealing more of it to me now… but I really need to finish <i>White Pickups</i> before I tackle a second big project! If I only didn't have to work for a living. :-PLarry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-4007288957956512182011-07-16T15:09:45.553-04:002011-07-16T15:09:45.553-04:00Hiya FAR, I just read through "Kate's win...Hiya FAR, I just read through "Kate's wings" then this sequel.<br />The concept is really interesting.<br /><br />I know I'm echoing some of the other comments, but I do believe that this should be developed into something rather longer, then submitted for publication. Depending on the content it could be a YA novel, or for a slightly younger age group.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-66621833163965593602011-07-16T12:45:23.672-04:002011-07-16T12:45:23.672-04:00I agree with those who say this could be a whole n...I agree with those who say this could be a whole novel. These two stories have been fantastic. (My daughter is 10 currently, so you have to hurry.) :)<br /><br />As a parent, I think my favorite part of this story was the comment about the "good enough moments". Isn't it so true that we wait around for "perfect moments" that never come? Great writing, FARChuck Allenhttp://www.chuckallen.usnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-69333436290640833872011-07-16T08:59:20.237-04:002011-07-16T08:59:20.237-04:00Beautifully done, Far! I have to agree, this coul...Beautifully done, Far! I have to agree, this could be a novel or perhaps at least other installments. And what really is normal? ;-)boran2https://www.blogger.com/profile/10483728578007756485noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-8007026678782654732011-07-16T06:50:44.038-04:002011-07-16T06:50:44.038-04:00Thank goodness you provided a link to last week...Thank goodness you provided a link to last week's, which I missed. You write this with a lightness of touch which makes it flow and read so well. I especially liked "the new moon allowed a few stars to force themselves through suburbia’s glow."<br /><br />Good writing and there is certainly an opening for a longer (dare i say, commercail) piece.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-80402868879605869222011-07-15T23:45:18.491-04:002011-07-15T23:45:18.491-04:00I really liked this, it explores that feeling that...I really liked this, it explores that feeling that young people have when they feel different and yet they then find out that they are not so different from others after all. It's the difference that makes them an individual.<br /><br />It raises the whole question of what is normal?Helenhttp://helen-scribbles.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-50113580211629303952011-07-15T22:18:37.166-04:002011-07-15T22:18:37.166-04:00Good evening…
Sonia, I'll do what I can. But ...Good evening…<br /><br />Sonia, I'll do what I can. But I really do have to finish <i>White Pickups</i>.<br /><br />Craig, thanks… if the boys have a secret ability, they haven't told me yet!<br /><br />Thanks, Michael. I prefer writing happy endings (or comedies in the Shakespearean sense).Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-81357124841793977492011-07-15T15:35:59.187-04:002011-07-15T15:35:59.187-04:00Ok, the normal comment box :) Anyways I liked the ...Ok, the normal comment box :) Anyways I liked the continuation and it's nice to read a story every now and again that has the happy fairy tale ending. (This one literally). It made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16518183823230864763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-49936551520654868122011-07-15T13:42:20.075-04:002011-07-15T13:42:20.075-04:00I like where you took the story. And I agree with ...I like where you took the story. And I agree with John. Does have a Kiki's Delivery Service feel to it. Which is wonderful. One of my favourite movies. <br /><br />I also think it would make a great YA book. Girls love "Girls only" kind of stuff. <br /><br />In addition it makes me wonder if the boys may also have a secret power or ability they keep hidden?Craig Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07176851401465801580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-59347206019356043352011-07-15T13:05:25.905-04:002011-07-15T13:05:25.905-04:00Brush up quick because I think it would make a pre...Brush up quick because I think it would make a pretty good YA novel.<br /><br />I loved it!Sonia Lalhttp://storytreasury.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-37488193292323278382011-07-15T12:15:52.073-04:002011-07-15T12:15:52.073-04:00Oops, hi Mari, I didn't refresh before I poste...Oops, hi Mari, I didn't refresh before I posted! Like I told Cathy, I need to brush up on YA before I really push much farther…Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-32241304402294640792011-07-15T12:14:38.053-04:002011-07-15T12:14:38.053-04:00Hi all!
Cathy, I'll have to read a couple YA ...Hi all!<br /><br />Cathy, I'll have to read a couple YA stories before I even try to expand much more on this one. Fortunately, I have a couple waiting in my Kindle.<br /><br />Apple, thanks!<br /><br />Icy, I think you're right. If her circle of friends understands her because they're also Enchanted Ones, then I think it'll be easier to deal with the rest of the world.<br /><br />JohnW, I've never read that one. Is it on Kindle, or a blog-story?<br /><br />Squidsquirts, welcome to the free-range insane asylum! Dialogue is one of those things that come with practice. Easy test: read it aloud. If it doesn't sound right, you'll know it needs fixing. You'll always find something to improve… in my case, it was dialogue, then stronger female characters, then PoV switches, on & on. Feel free to poke around and see what else I've written!Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-86012791265266370362011-07-15T12:11:56.300-04:002011-07-15T12:11:56.300-04:00I'm with everyone else about the YA novel, FAR...I'm with everyone else about the YA novel, FAR. It seems you've got gold in your hands. ;)Marihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07303695124956391293noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-87720255889454252992011-07-15T11:47:48.572-04:002011-07-15T11:47:48.572-04:00Great piece. You have dialogue beaten! My pleasure...Great piece. You have dialogue beaten! My pleasure at reading it was a little marred with my envy :)Squidsquirtshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15521427577588027119noreply@blogger.com