tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post3085739357257180990..comments2023-11-28T22:47:40.465-05:00Comments on Tales from FAR Manor: #FridayFlash: To Begin WithLarry Kollarhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-28204206715624344772011-12-23T11:39:34.105-05:002011-12-23T11:39:34.105-05:00I bought a boat from an old Ladies shed once for a...I bought a boat from an old Ladies shed once for a hundred quid, that was similarly cursed. <br /><br />Like the idea of him eternally wrestling the bike trying to stop its killing spree.Adam John Keeperhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05954915030178318057noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-28997254055746424522011-12-18T20:45:52.289-05:002011-12-18T20:45:52.289-05:00Howdy all!
Flyingscribbler, the structure was eit...Howdy all!<br /><br />Flyingscribbler, the structure was either inspiration or just something that demanded to be added. And yeah, the old lady had something up her sleeve. A longer story would have seen him get back to/at her.<br /><br />Sonia, some bikes just seem to be possessed! Glad you liked it!<br /><br />Thanks, Chuck!<br /><br />Aidan, yes, that wasn't developed as well as I'd planned. He felt like he'd taken advantage of her, and thought if he'd offered what it was really worth that the curse wouldn't have had any effect.<br /><br />Thanks, Icy!Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-37115549030948882032011-12-18T15:18:06.199-05:002011-12-18T15:18:06.199-05:00It's like Christine on two wheels.
Loved this...It's like Christine on two wheels.<br /><br />Loved this though.Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-43482465435023522902011-12-18T12:53:58.757-05:002011-12-18T12:53:58.757-05:00Great opening line. I love the way this hints at w...Great opening line. I love the way this hints at what will, and sets the tone. I enjoyed the story. <br /><br />You asked for criticism. I found the opening created a question for me that wasn't resolved in the ending. That question is related to him wishing he'd offered her more money. Almost as a sense of regret, but the ending doesn't seem to have regret as much as warning.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14170148559429001125noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-74422279899941722272011-12-17T23:20:37.108-05:002011-12-17T23:20:37.108-05:00An undead bike? Yikes! This guy got a lot more tha...An undead bike? Yikes! This guy got a lot more than he expected with this purchase. Great story.Chuck Allenhttp://www.chuckallen.usnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-49674687703387795322011-12-17T14:10:03.884-05:002011-12-17T14:10:03.884-05:00He needs a bike exorcist. LOL Or a bike slayer or ...He needs a bike exorcist. LOL Or a bike slayer or something.<br /><br />Really liked the last two lines. Also this line: "Walter wi— would"Sonia Lalhttp://storytreasury.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-44756054528570430822011-12-17T10:31:17.556-05:002011-12-17T10:31:17.556-05:00I rather liked this one. In particular the structu...I rather liked this one. In particular the structure: "The Harley was dead", "The Harley was alive", "The Harley is undead". I knew that old lady wasn't to be trusted.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-86624819779642084372011-12-17T08:52:21.119-05:002011-12-17T08:52:21.119-05:00Tim, they usually don't take over so literally...Tim, they usually don't take over so literally, either!<br /><br />Helen, that's quite a compliment — sounds like you got absorbed in the story!<br /><br />Thanks, John. Funny thing, I'll put in "sneaky lines" that seem so obvious, and they often go by without a mention.Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-28169954943148306992011-12-17T07:18:00.581-05:002011-12-17T07:18:00.581-05:00I thought the sneaky line was a bit too obvious, b...I thought the sneaky line was a bit too obvious, but then my mind actively seeks twists as I read. So I saw it coming, but it was brilliantly written and the end was superb, the last four sentences couldn't get any better. =)John Xerohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17492709629314280633noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-62303421864888278262011-12-17T00:05:23.918-05:002011-12-17T00:05:23.918-05:00Oh a deadly bike indeed! Very good, I found myself...Oh a deadly bike indeed! Very good, I found myself reading faster and faster towards the end, just like the bike surging forward. ^__^Helen A. Howellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12748128819820230841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-44300943178606876882011-12-16T23:59:06.298-05:002011-12-16T23:59:06.298-05:00Sometimes when our hobbies take over our lives it&...Sometimes when our hobbies take over our lives it's not our fault.Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-37167789129682474502011-12-16T22:40:32.475-05:002011-12-16T22:40:32.475-05:00Tom, the vintage Triumphs would certainly qualify....Tom, the vintage Triumphs would certainly qualify. Wasn't Lucas's nickname "Lord of Darkness"? Thanks!<br /><br />Raven, I doubt it will do anything as polite as <i>ask</i> — I expect a line to snake up and attach itself to his wrist before long!Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-89052485545433824622011-12-16T15:34:07.834-05:002011-12-16T15:34:07.834-05:00Bloody awesome. Soon, it should ask to be fed.Bloody awesome. Soon, it should ask to be fed.Raven Corinn Carlukhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06014248975870886289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-3687759122122540122011-12-16T14:43:13.060-05:002011-12-16T14:43:13.060-05:00This puts a whole new spin on "Born To Run.&q...This puts a whole new spin on "Born To Run." Of course, in the UK it would have to be a Triumph Bonneville. They were definitely possessed by the Devil.<br /><br />Great story Larry..Tom Gillespie : @tom_gillespiehttp://www.tom-gillespie.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-55401732971090129402011-12-16T13:50:49.847-05:002011-12-16T13:50:49.847-05:00Hey all!
Quinn, the difference between this Harle...Hey all!<br /><br />Quinn, the difference between this Harley and Christine was that the bike likes blood. Pushing it doesn't repair it.<br /><br />Craig, thanks. Rare company you & Quinn put me in there. Glad to see that sneaky line got caught!<br /><br />Tony, I couldn't resist!<br /><br />Thanks Michael. I changed the name, although the story really didn't want to update. I had to trick it. I'm not kidding. 8-o<br /><br />Cherie, Ganymeder, thanks much!<br /><br />John, I don't think the rider caught fire or anything. :-DLarry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-62514895975316526502011-12-16T10:49:39.979-05:002011-12-16T10:49:39.979-05:00Is this about that new Ghost Rider trailer, Larry?...Is this about that new Ghost Rider trailer, Larry?John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-46772187989669615222011-12-16T10:41:11.481-05:002011-12-16T10:41:11.481-05:00Really scary!Really scary!Cat Russellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14160039271069426174noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-76315860971830319472011-12-16T10:36:22.077-05:002011-12-16T10:36:22.077-05:00I love the last lines. An undead Harley is pretty ...I love the last lines. An undead Harley is pretty creepy. :)Cherie Reichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16663147386014122939noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-59376333143351590952011-12-16T10:21:17.723-05:002011-12-16T10:21:17.723-05:00I found that line with: "Walter wi-- would be...I found that line with: "Walter wi-- would be pleased." to be great foreshadowing, but it was vague enough to where I couldn't predict what would happen.<br /><br />I guess as far as some #stabbylove, I found the part where the bike breaks down to be a bit out of place. It did give me pause to think the bike was going to try and strand him out in the cold or something like that, but then I realized even if he was half way, he would only be 5mi from Jim's or his own place. Perhaps something with the blood awakened it, but I'm not sure either since it surged for the rabbit.<br /><br />Also, and this is picky, you start two consecutive paragraphs with "Water would be fine." and essentially "Walter would be proud." Very similar construction and the Walter and Water are quite similar as well. It played a little trick on my eyes, and I thought for a moment that 'Walter' was 'Water'<br /><br />But overall this was a great piece and I loved the ending!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16518183823230864763noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-7555535560417420032011-12-16T09:16:34.435-05:002011-12-16T09:16:34.435-05:00Fantastic, Larry. I loved the undead bike, hungry ...Fantastic, Larry. I loved the undead bike, hungry for blood, but the first line? A classic Christmas opening.Tony Nolandhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15090583562737225942noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-19972869953570299832011-12-16T08:13:14.362-05:002011-12-16T08:13:14.362-05:00Brilliant, definitely one of my favourites of your...Brilliant, definitely one of my favourites of yours. Stephen King would be proud!<br /><br />"Walter wi— would" - such a sneaky line there :).Craig Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07176851401465801580noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-65875345708781022832011-12-16T07:43:12.362-05:002011-12-16T07:43:12.362-05:00Awesome tale. The Harley is undead. And it's h...Awesome tale. The Harley is undead. And it's <i>hungry</i>. I loved the closing lines; capped this flash off perfectly. <br /><br />(Your piece reminded me in many ways of Christine by Stephen King.)Quinn Smythwoodhttp://quinnsmythwood.blogspot.com/2011/12/friday-flash-fiction-6.htmlnoreply@blogger.com