tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post5895377021317671191..comments2023-11-28T22:47:40.465-05:00Comments on Tales from FAR Manor: The Staff-Stealers (#FridayFlash)Larry Kollarhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-5557494119677736022013-06-12T00:58:23.995-04:002013-06-12T00:58:23.995-04:00Helen, think of it as a bedtime story that sorcere...Helen, think of it as a bedtime story that sorcerers tell their kids…<br /><br />Jack, I have to agree. I'll have to think about how to unpack that one a little.<br /><br />Thanks, Tim! You're right, it was Jira and Pyanya.<br /><br />Icy, sometime's it's just <i>fun</i> to be over-literal!<br /><br />Thanks, Sonia!Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-80623982001478112852013-06-09T15:02:37.179-04:002013-06-09T15:02:37.179-04:00Enjoyable story Larry. The end left me with wantin...Enjoyable story Larry. The end left me with wanting more. Keep up the writing so I can see where this is going.<br /><br />Take care<br /><br />WhitFMhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14471558413705720149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-64038707088025297902013-06-08T21:41:44.585-04:002013-06-08T21:41:44.585-04:00It didn't feel long. It must be if it is over ...It didn't feel long. It must be if it is over a thousand words, but it read fairly quickly. I enjoyed it.<br />Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-69216132401654820502013-06-08T12:15:33.155-04:002013-06-08T12:15:33.155-04:00Ah yes, the perils of being not specific enough, o...Ah yes, the perils of being not specific enough, or being TOO specific!Icy Sedgwickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11501193571425442406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-44003765342691799292013-06-08T10:10:28.814-04:002013-06-08T10:10:28.814-04:00Really enjoyable and I agree that it doesn't s...Really enjoyable and I agree that it doesn't seem overly long.<br /><br />If you'll allow me to be picky about one little thing, does the pronoun "they" in the very last sentence refer to Jira and Pyanya? I think that's what you meant, but the preceding sentence refers to Pyanya, Thurun, and many other Makers. Maybe use "both women" instead of "they"?<br /><br />Again, nice work.Tim VanSant Writeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17614259042362664840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-49335503333145881002013-06-08T09:53:42.994-04:002013-06-08T09:53:42.994-04:00Great stuff, Larry. Although, I must admit I had t...Great stuff, Larry. Although, I must admit I had to read the opening "Once, in the time of Camac That Was, before the Makers departed Termag for the City of Refuge, Thurun was the First Protector." line a couple of times! There's a lot there!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-61356243682640057432013-06-08T00:35:11.241-04:002013-06-08T00:35:11.241-04:00Sort of like a fairy tale wasn't it with a hap...Sort of like a fairy tale wasn't it with a happy ending nice!Helen A. Howellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12748128819820230841noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-387397424551982272013-06-07T23:14:38.012-04:002013-06-07T23:14:38.012-04:00John, that's pretty funny! In this world, &quo...John, that's pretty funny! In this world, "Once, in the time of Camac That Was" is a common opening for a fairy tale or bedtime story.Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-31763566094222064142013-06-07T23:13:44.218-04:002013-06-07T23:13:44.218-04:00Thanks, Kath! This is the same world as Accidental...Thanks, Kath! This is the same world as <i>Accidental Sorcerers</i>, but in a distant past. I rather expect sorcerers use this as a bedtime story for their own children.<br /><br />Katherine, most mages have a stick. In Bailar's case, it helps with his balance. Thurun's is likely a prop—the folk expect him to have a staff, so he has a staff. ;-)<br /><br />Thanks, Peter!<br /><br />Eric, I probably did rush the ending. I was surprised to realize that Pyanya is a legendary character, more popularly known as the Lady of Isenbund. She gets a mention in the fourth <i>Accidental Sorcerers</i> story (WIP). She and Thurun himself are two of the (very) few people from that time who are known by name.Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-73200544569875310582013-06-07T23:02:41.313-04:002013-06-07T23:02:41.313-04:00Couldn't help reading this is the voice of the...Couldn't help reading this is the voice of the narrator from the original Conan movie. Especially with the "time of the ___" intro, it has that feel.John Wiswellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07416044628686736927noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-71678426709485652302013-06-07T17:05:33.994-04:002013-06-07T17:05:33.994-04:00Excellent story. As mentioned, the ending seemed r...Excellent story. As mentioned, the ending seemed rushed, but it didn't take away from the overall story. You could easily mold this into something much bigger.Eric J. Krausehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05774468607814244185noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-17157644183800019802013-06-07T15:17:30.850-04:002013-06-07T15:17:30.850-04:00I agree with Katherine. Much cooler that it was a ...I agree with Katherine. Much cooler that it was a normal stick. I also agree with Kath that it didn't feel long at all. A credit to the writing of course!Peter Newmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00063057237086940387noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-47367332619607001562013-06-07T13:24:55.810-04:002013-06-07T13:24:55.810-04:00I love how the stick was indeed only a stick! Som...I love how the stick was indeed only a stick! Somehow it improved the plausibility and showed Thurun's character better. Katherine Hajerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08270232675026751342noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-12954391.post-12574352483198680812013-06-07T11:49:05.686-04:002013-06-07T11:49:05.686-04:00I enjoyed this so much, Larry. It didn't feel ...I enjoyed this so much, Larry. It didn't feel over long at all. In fact, if anything, that last paragraph - while tying the story up nicely - made it feel rushed at the end. I wanted to carry on reading. <br /><br />You set up the world really well and I liked how laid back Thurun was and how he went about teaching the girls a lesson, and had a bit of fun at the same time! Kathhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12719765628886270649noreply@blogger.com